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3. Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world’s forests amounts to death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 is one of
the good
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the best
 options for people to relieve stress and understand other countries’ tradition.
However
, some people are arguing that cultures of different countries are coming in rapidly so people will not need to travel abroad to have new experiences.
Instead
, people could easily try everything in their
country
. In my perspective, I completely disagree with that statement. The bases for my view are
tradition
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traditionally
 transmitting, missing “pieces”, and realistic experiences.
Firstly
, the original meaning of the
culture
 will incompletely be true.
For example
, Halloween and Valentines were originated in other countries and it came to our
country
 for a long time. People could know that Valentines Day is the day for lovers and Halloween is for
ghosts but
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ghosts, but
 some covered information that only native people know will not be revealed. That directly shows that the meaning of the events cannot fully be understood.
Secondly
, the
culture
 cannot completely be filled up in another
country
. Some surveys from our
country
’s researchers show that there are 70% of restaurants which originated in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
 has a different menu with their home
country
.
Furthermore
, most of Vietnam’s menu missed some famous dishes that help the brand become popular.
Therefore
, citizens could not try all of the objectives they would want to work on. The opponent of
this
 idea may state that the experience is optional and each person has their own feelings about new cultures.
Nevertheless
, they cannot ignore the truth that they could have
the better
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the best
 impression when actually meet the subjects.
For example
,
In addition
, there are a lot of disadvantages when people cannot travel abroad.
Therefore
, the statement shown people now could try different
culture
 in their home
instead
 of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 abroad cannot ultimately be supported. If they want the full
experiences
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experience
on
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of
 a different
culture
, they should try to fly away with their family or their friend to
fare
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the fare
.

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