Some people says that music is a good way of bringing people of different culturs and ages to gather. What to extend do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, people needs are increasing and housing is one of

the the

definite article

the

necessary

thing

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things

for

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in

modern

life

. People crash the lands and build the land into apartments, offices,

…

Accept space

…

That affects the animal’s

life

and lead them to the endangered zone. Some may extinct if people keep invading their territory. Some people think about it and they say their needs are more important than saving lands for endangered animal. In my opinion, I disagree that

people

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person

person's

needs are more important than saving lands for endangered animal.

Firstly

, animals are a big role in human’s

life

. Especially in education, when studying about

animal

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animals

the animal

, students need to have a research about the specie they have

chose

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chosen

. Sometimes, they

also

go outside and have a reality experience to know it deeper. When the specie has gone, students

can not

can not

cannot

study it professionally.

That is

one of

thousand things

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the thousand things

animal

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animals

can contribute to human’s

life

.

Secondly

, endangered animals can be a target of hunters. As you know,

rhino

is

an

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a

limited-number animals. So hunters usually choose

rhino

to kill, and

then

sell its parts of body to buyers. Hunters have a unique

favor

the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people

flavour

. They think that the more endangered animal,

more money

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the more money

they can make.

That is

a motivation for the hunters to hunt and kill them. They can easily find the animal because the

animal’s

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animal

shelters had been

zoning

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zoned

. Animals do not have any way to hide because all of the land left has been

invading

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invaded

by human. And the conclusion is that animal will die and some endangered animal may extinct. When it happens, no industry and company may protect and decline

this

savage problem.

Lastly

, animal is an essential partner with nature.

For example

, bees collect pollen and help flowers to finish

evolutioning

.

However

, bee is not an endangered animal at the moment. Some endangered animal

such

as white

rhino

and Pacific walrus

also

have a great effect

to

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of

in

nature. But since climate change became strong, walrus died gradually millions per year, which lead them nearly to distinction. As you know,

last

male white

Accept comma addition

male, white

rhino

has died because

also

the climate change. In conclusion, people

needs

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need

as housing, farmland is as important as animal places, especially for endangered animal. People need to take responsibility for their activities and remember that animals

also

have a heart.