The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs illustrate the numbers of graduate and postgraduate British
students
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, who did not
chose
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choose
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full time
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full-time
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employment,
adopt
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and adopt
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various other options after
passed
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passing
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out from university.
Overall
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, it can be observed from the graphs that a majority of the
students
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opted for higher study, and the least number of
pupils
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chose voluntary work. After graduation,
while
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near about 30000
pupils
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decided to pursue
further
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education, roughly 18000
students
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decided to do a
part time
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part-time
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job.
However
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, almost 16000 aspirants remained unemployed, and at least
number
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a number
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of
students
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opted for voluntary work.
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,
the
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a
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large portion of the
pupils
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, approximately 3000
students
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after post-graduation decided to go for higher study. When 2500
pupils
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were earning
though
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through
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part time
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part-time
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jobs, 1600 candidates remained jobless. Similar to graduate
student
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students
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, a small section of
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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involved themselves in
voluntary
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the voluntary
a voluntary
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job
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jobs
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. Interestingly, both graphs are like a mirror image of one another;
while
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students
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interested in higher study after their completion of
current
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their current
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degree are the highest, the voluntary work preference remained the least priority.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, pupils with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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