The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs illustrate the numbers of graduate and postgraduate British
students
, who did not chose
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choose
full time
employment, Add a hyphen
full-time
adopt
various other options after Correct word choice
and adopt
passed
out from university.
Wrong verb form
passing
Overall
, it can be observed from the graphs that a majority of the students
opted for higher study, and the least number of pupils
chose voluntary work.
After graduation, while
near about 30000 pupils
decided to pursue further
education, roughly 18000 students
decided to do a part time
job. Add a hyphen
part-time
However
, almost 16000 aspirants remained unemployed, and at least number
of Correct article usage
a number
students
opted for voluntary work.
Similarly
, the
large portion of the Correct article usage
a
pupils
, approximately 3000 students
after post-graduation decided to go for higher study. When 2500 pupils
were earning though
Correct your spelling
through
part time
jobs, 1600 candidates remained jobless. Similar to graduate Add a hyphen
part-time
student
, a small section of Fix the agreement mistake
students
postgraduate
involved themselves in Fix the agreement mistake
postgraduates
voluntary
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the voluntary
a voluntary
job
.
Interestingly, both graphs are like a mirror image of one another; Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
while
students
interested in higher study after their completion of current
degree are the highest, the voluntary work preference remained the least priority.Correct pronoun usage
their current
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