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Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre school age. Other working people think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no denying that nowadays, families
has been becoming
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have been becoming
have become
 short in comparison to
past especially
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past, especially
 in cities and there are many reasons behind
this
shift but
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shift, but
 these changes give birth to a contention that whether it is
positive or negative trend
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a positive or negative trend
. As per my perspective, it has profound impact on the life of
multitude so
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multitude, so
 it is
negative trend
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a negative trend
. To commence with, there are some reasons due to which most of the people like to live in nuclear families and predominant reason is that as inflation is increasing day by day so it becomes quite difficult for the individuals who live in urban areas to get better accommodation. Due to
this
, people tended to live in a house which is Very small because of
this
people
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person
 prefer to live in small families or sometimes alone so that they can fulfil all needs of their family members and live in
this
 era of inflation. In my opinion, it has
adverse impact
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an adverse impact
 on the lives of individuals because of some reasons.
Firstly
, it
weaken
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weakens
 the bond of strong relationships as multitude live
alone so
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alone, so
 they don't spend quality time with their families. When individuals
lives
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live
 away from their house they may feel alone due to which they may become
victim
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a victim
victims
 of loneliness and homesickness. To recapitulate, inflation
has bring
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has brought
major change
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major changes
a major change
 in the lifestyle of multitude which
effect
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affect
 them mentally and physically.
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