Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre school age. Other working people think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no denying that nowadays, families

has been becoming

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have been becoming

have become

short in comparison to

past especially

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past, especially

in cities and there are many reasons behind

this

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shift but

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shift, but

these changes give birth to a contention that whether it is

positive or negative trend

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a positive or negative trend

. As per my perspective, it has profound impact on the life of

multitude so

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multitude, so

it is

negative trend

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a negative trend

. To commence with, there are some reasons due to which most of the people like to live in nuclear families and predominant reason is that as inflation is increasing day by day so it becomes quite difficult for the individuals who live in urban areas to get better accommodation. Due to

this

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, people tended to live in a house which is Very small because of

this

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people

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person

prefer to live in small families or sometimes alone so that they can fulfil all needs of their family members and live in

this

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era of inflation. In my opinion, it has

adverse impact

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an adverse impact

on the lives of individuals because of some reasons.

Firstly

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, it

weaken

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weakens

the bond of strong relationships as multitude live

alone so

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alone, so

they don't spend quality time with their families. When individuals

lives

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live

away from their house they may feel alone due to which they may become

victim

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a victim

victims

of loneliness and homesickness. To recapitulate, inflation

has bring

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has brought

major change

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major changes

a major change

in the lifestyle of multitude which

effect

the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion

affect

them mentally and physically.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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0
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

231 words

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