It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Some people think that it is essential for young one to be aware of good or bad things at childhood and they can be good with

this

only by physical

punishment

from parents and teachers

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In my opinion

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sometimes it is good to give a penalty to teach children a good lesson.

To begin

with

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learning good behaviour and ethics at an early stage of life boost the growth and development of the kids later on in

future

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the future

.Those youngsters who are good at decision taking between

right

and wrong at an early age are more confident and successful in later life.

However

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punishment especially

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punishment, especially

physical plays a big role in polishing and discipline of

teenagers but

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teenagers, but

it is not necessary to give reward to every child for bad behaviour.

for

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For

example, if children use

inappropraite

not suitable for a particular occasion etc

inappropriate

words in front of elders, parents or teacher would teach them that these words are not appropriate and should not be used in future.

Furthermore

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punishment

on some occasion is more fruitful to learn a good habit quickly.It may be in many of

forms but

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the forms, but

the forms but

physical torture is more suitable to bring back a naughty and ill mannered child on a

right

track.

In addition increasing

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In addition, increasing

restriction on outing and lowering pocket money

also

helps parents to guide their children in

right way

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the right way

.According to known education specialist it is very good to keep

ones

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one's

children away from bad company of friends. To wrap it up

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younger children

learns

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learn

good or bad behaviour from their

childhood especially

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childhood, especially

from their siblings but sometimes it crucial to put them on

right

track physical

punishment

should be given

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home and school.

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