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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. Discuss

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Many people believe that completing a
university
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degree
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 is the only way to get a good
job
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; others think work
experience
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 matters more. While universities prepare an individual theoretically, working after
school
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 equips a person with skills required for coping in the workplace. In my opinion, both the aforementioned arguments are true to a certain extent. A
university
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degree
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 enhances an individual’s knowledge and promotes intellectual reasoning.
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 training makes an individual more mature and ready to face the challenges of the workplace.
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, when I was at
university
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, most of our assignments involved critical thinking and research;
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 has expanded my knowledge in my field. In
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 modern world, most
employers especially
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employers, especially
 those in sectors like finance and health insist that all applicants should have a
degree
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. A student who starts working immediately after leaving
school
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 will not be able to obtain a professional
degree
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 and
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 cannot find employment in these sectors. On the flip side, there are several benefits to getting a
job
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 soon after leaving
school
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. A
job
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 will give the individual valuable work
experience
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however it
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however, it
 is limited to certain occupations
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 as those in arts and crafts, fashion designing and cooking where creativity and skills matter more.
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, my friend, who is a chef at a famous restaurant never went to a cooking
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;
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, she makes delicious food because she
has been working
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has worked
 at a restaurant ever since she left
school
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.
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experience
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 helped her polish her cooking skills. To conclude, both
university
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 education and work
experience
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 have a role in guaranteeing a good
job
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. Some occupations require a
university
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degree
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 while others do not. In my opinion, everyone should choose what is right for them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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