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Some people think that children should start formal education at schools as early as possible. Others feel that children should go to school when they are at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that studying is an essential part of a vibrant life , especially in childhood and
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youth.
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, for many, it is considered better to start at age 7, at least. In the following essay, I will focus on both sides and give my own opinion. On the one hand, there are several benefits to
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 education as fast as possible. First of all , being passionate about the surroundings at age 5 or so is much more likely to be higher
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 to the older, even 7. Namely, childish enthusiasm and memory-based productivity
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 the young remember deeply what is taught and maximize the rate of
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. Second of all , adaptation to a social life (making new friends, attending school programs, spending time
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followers
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 a
child
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 to create
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 the upcoming years,
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 of taking a year later, children can have
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access to save a long time for
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other purposes.
On the other hand
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, starting formal education when a
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 is at least 7 can be
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 profitable. One of the main positive
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 is that requiring
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 of years for
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 of young humans` skills, the older may be able to adjust to utterly new situations effectively rather than the
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little ones
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. To illustrate, 7-year-old pupils probably perceive how to use pens or pencils
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Furthermore
, children are able to share more years with family. It is pivotal to be in a family atmosphere, i.e.
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 from parents, kindness of the siblings, etc. for the development of a
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. By way of
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conclusion, education should be started when a
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 is ready, regardless of the age categories. Spending time
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child
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. Personally, I believe that
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little humans need
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 alacrity.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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