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The chart below shows the average delay in flight departures (in minutes) at different airports in the USA for five different time periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the average delay in flight departures (in minutes) at different airports in the USA for five different time periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the delay in
flight
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 departures in US airports for
time
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 periods from 1996 to 2000, from 2001 to 2005, from 2006 to 2010 and from 2011 to 2015 to
Dallas
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, New
York
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, Chicago and
San
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Francisco
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. The
delays
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 have changed over the
period
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 of
time
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 from 1996 to 2015. On average, over the
period
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 of
time
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 from 1996 to 2015 the most
delays
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occured
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occurred
 in
flight
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 departures to New
York
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. During the
period
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 from 2001 to
2005
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,2005
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the
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flight
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delays
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 to New
York
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 were over thirty
minutes
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.
This
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 is the longest
flight
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delays
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delay
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 among the
flights
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 to other mentioned cities and among other mentioned periods of
time
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. From 1996 to 2000, the most
delays
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occured
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occurred
 in
flights
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 to Chicago and New
York
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 (over thirty
minutes
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). The least
delays
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occured
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occurred
 in
flights
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 to
Dallas
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 (under twenty
minutes
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) and to
San
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Francisco
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 (under ten
minutes
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). During the
period
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 of
time
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 from 2001 to 2005, the delay times increased
in
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on
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 all
flights
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 except
fore
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for
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 the
flights
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 to Chicago. Delay times in
flights
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 to Chicago decreased to just above ten
minutes
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. During the
period
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 of
time
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 from 2006 to 2010, the longest
delays
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 were in the
flights
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 to New
York
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 and
San
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Francisco
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. As
such
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,
delays
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 in
flights
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 to
San
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Francisco
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 increased to over twenty
minutes
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. The
delays
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 to
Dallas
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 and Chicago decreased. During the
last
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period
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 of
time
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 from 2011 to 2015 the longest
delays
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occured
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occurred
 in
flights
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 to New
York
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, and
to
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apply
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San
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Francisco
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 as well (over 20
minutes
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 each). The waiting
time
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in
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for
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flights
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 to
Dallas
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 dropped again and
delays
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 in
flights
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 to Chicago increased to around fifteen
minutes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words flight, time, dallas, york, san, francisco, delays, period, minutes, flights with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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