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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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These days, many
music
 types are played and heard all around the globe.
Music
 is necessary to transmit culture to future generations and to relax after a hard day. National traditional and international
music
 are both important, to keep historical roots alive and to learn about the cultures of other countries.
Music
 is essential to relax, it gives our brain a break from the stress and obligations of everyday activities. Driving back home from work,
for example
, can be much more relaxing if you are listening to your favourite radio station. It can help,
consequently
, to chill out and disconnect from any problems and get home in a better mood to have a high quality family time. Another reason why we need
music
 is to increase motivation to exercise. Having the right beat at the gym, in like manner, can make working out more fun and entertaining, like Zumba classes, which use a variety of rhythms to teach the different exercises. At present, traditional
music
 is important for every country as it transmits culture. In Argentina,
for example
, the most traditional
music
 is Folklore, and through it, historical events, values and cultural roots are explained. International
music
,
furthermore
, is heard everywhere and is key to understand other cultures and have more options when choosing what to hear in different moments and moods of the day. Rock and roll, indie, twist, salsa, merengue and classical
music
 are some of the choices we have. In conclusion,
music
 is needed, in my opinion, on a daily basis, mainly to relax and work out. Countries` traditional
music
 and international rhythms are equally important, not only to share our roots with
next
 generations, but
also
 to get to know the other countries` culture and newest tunes. Nowadays,
this
 sharing of
music
 has become possible due to online radios and apps
such
 as Spotify.
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