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High school should allow students to study the courses that students want to study. Specify reasons and example to support your opinion.

#school #students #study #courses #support
It is very true that education plays vital role in our life. It has been debated that it is very important that teenagers should be allowed to choose
thier
of them or themselves
their
 field of study since it helps them in many ways. In my opinion, I agree with the statement because we should be pursuing courses that are more enjoyable than
burdan
Suggestion
a burden
burden
burdens
. My view is explained
further
 in detail.
Firstly
, students should be studying courses that they are interested in. It helps them focus better and get good grades.
Secondly
, It encourages them to learn and understand in depth.
Lastly
, They get
clear idea
Suggestion
a clear idea
 of
thier
of them or themselves
their
 future field of study.
For Instance
, If someone is not good in maths, they would not likely to choose engineering or commerce field. Apart from that, when pupils are forced to take subjects that they
dont
do not
don't
 like or understand, they take too much stress which can end up in depression. It can affect their self esteem and they can even turn to drugs and smoking.
For example
, every year there way too many
sucides
the act of killing yourself
suicides
subsidies
 are
occuring
come to pass
occurring
 because of stress of education. All in all, I strongly believe that students should always have options in studies so they can expand themselves and explore various
streem
 can choose
better
Suggestion
the best
 option for them which can help
building
Suggestion
build
bright future
Suggestion
a bright future
bright futures
.

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