More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In these days overweight is serious

concern specially

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concern, especially

concern especially

in children. Eating pattern completely have been changed not only in children as well as in adults.

Specially

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Especially

developed

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developing

countries that problem is in peak. Children from starting age starts gaining weight and become overweight in

few years

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a few years

. It has some serious effects going to explain in following paragraphs

To begin

overweight children cannot focus in studies due to laziness because

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the more

they eat more, they become lazy.

Moreover

, that children always be sick because if child have perfect weight according to age and height they always be playing, jumping and stay healthy.

In addition

, cannot play any sports as any kind of sports want energy and

stamina but

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stamina, but

overweight child

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the overweight child

an overweight child

cannot be

energetic

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energized

and less in stamina.

However

, if we take

example

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the example

an example

of china, I have seen some viral videos of kids in that country start some kind of sports in early age and in Asian

games none

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games, none

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

country still

beat

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beats

in gaining medals they always stay in

top position

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the top position

because kids have start trained in childhood due to that they cannot be overweight. That problem arising

specially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

in developed countries due to eating habit some kind of snacks and sugary drinks make kids overweight. To conclude being overweight specially for children is not good for them as they are future of wealthy countries if they are not fit, they cannot make some great ideas which lead to country towards success. Healthy mind come with healthy food and healthy food make fit to children.

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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you are unhappy about a plan to make your local airport bigger and increase the number of flights. You live near the airport. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter Explain where you live Describe the problem Give reasons why you don’t want this development.

In some countries,it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age.Is this a positive or negative development?

In some cultures,older people are valued most highly. In other cultures,youth is value more than experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion as to which age should be most valued.

In many corporations around the world there are fewer women than men in some management positions, and many people believe that this has created inequality in the workplace. Discuss the reasons why this is? How can we solve inequality in the workplace?