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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others, however, believe that it is a waste of money since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Building libraries
has been
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have been
 a public concern nowadays. Some hold the view that more libraries should be built while others regard it as something unnecessary.
Indeed it
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Indeed, it
 is an expensive invest to build libraries.
However
, libraries have some advantages that online reading can never possess. Establishing libraries
means
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mean
 spending a lot of money and time on construction, means looking for books to enrich the shelves and
also
 paying salaries to the workers there. Certainly it should be well concerned before actually making a decision whether to build or not because it weights the burden on the government. But we always need to take the future benefits
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 consideration.The libraries will provide local citizens and students with a perfect place to learn and study without the disruption caused by noise. The meeting rooms available in the libraries will satisfy visitors’ demand for a quiet place to discuss and cooperate on a certain topic or program. There’s no
such
 advantages for viewing the Internet, especially the special atmosphere in the libraries that affect people to stay quiet. The Internet
do have allowed
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has allowed
allows
is allowing
does allow
did allow
was allowing
 us to access information
easier but
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easier, but
 things on the websites are always messy. Usually when we search something on
a
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an
 engine, the results count up to thousands, so it is difficult for us to refine and select the most useful ones. Spending hours in going through all the articles
is really demanding
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are really demanding
.
On the contrary
, in libraries, all the books are carefully selected and students don’t need to worry about any occurrence of false information. And as a matter of fact, reading texts on websites aren’t always as effective as reading
paper
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the paper
-made books.
Thus in
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Thus, in
 conclusion, I believe that reading books in libraries
is
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are
 more effective than obtaining information on websites and libraries are of great significance to people’s lives. So more libraries do should be built in each town.
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