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These days more and more people are travelling domestically or internationally. There are clearly many benefits to it but there are some who argue that it has also some drawbacks. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of travelling? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the growing tendency of travelling globally could bring positive or negative development. I personally believe that travelling brings varied beneficial aspects
to
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of
 society and individuals.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits of travelling and disadvantages, using relevant examples from BBC news and Queensland University to demonstrate points and prove arguments.
Body · 1
On the one hand, there is ample evidence in
favoring
promote over another
favouring
 of travelling whether domestic or oversea. Travelling
industry
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 directly contributes and cooperate towards local business and culture by bringing tourists and businessman
to
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in
 the local community.
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, recent empirical research by Queensland University showed that 20% of capital income of one country comes from the tourism
industry
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. The earnings can be used to build roads and hospital in undeveloped nations.
Therefore
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, it is conclusively clear that leaders worldwide should encourage individuals to visit a remote or oversea community and should build
safety roads
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safety, roads
 and hospital by using public funds responsibility and appropriately.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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,
although
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 there is a case for travelling boosts the economics of the local and international community, there is some disadvantages
as a result
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 of
this
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 tendency. Individuals who travel by cars or aircraft creates
indirectly
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indirect
 carbon dioxide and generate
liter
a metric unit of capacity, formerly defined as the volume of one kilogram of pure water under standard conditions; now equal to 1,000 cubic centimeters (or approximately 1.75 pints)
litre
letters
lither
. Air pollution represented a big challenge in modern society for all communities
.
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if
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If
 the trend continues to grow in numbers globally, governments should
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 impose some restriction to the manufactures vehicle and air
industry
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.
For example
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,
a
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an
 article published by BBC news suggested that since the advent of globalization and travelling
industry
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, the contamination rate has
increase
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increased
 drastically globally.
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, it is possible to state beyond doubt that travelling
industry
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 generates detrimental effects to our natural environment.
Conclusion
To conclude from the examples and arguments given, I firmly believe that the positive development of travelling enrich and enhance our local and external communities in a
varied
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variety
 ways
on the other hand
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, negative effects generated to our environment can be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 and observed.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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