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A country's future depend on its young people. Therefore, it is often argued that government should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree?

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ounger generation
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The younger generation
is regarded as a driving force for the faith of a nation.
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, it is often believed that authorities must plough money into the youth. I completely agree with above viewpoint and opine that a
country
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 will be more s
trengthen
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strengthened
in terms of life quality and getting jobs to earn
.
Accept space
.
 To commence with, allocating h
andsome amount
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a handsome amount
of capital in adolescents will ultimately develop the standard of living among c
itizens,
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the citizens
 because more and more number of teenaged people are educated and capable of earning higher income.
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, Canada has lower illiteracy rate, which results in inclination of per capita income.
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, ranked as one of the world's best place among individuals to live in.
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, unemployment ratio will eventually decrease, as youth a
re
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is
highly capable of acquiring various ways of getting employed. Not only in terms of employment, but they can tackle any personal and social issues.
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, c
enters
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
are always required to ensure that they invest o
n
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in
growing people for b
etterment
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the betterment
of the
country
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.
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, some people assert that young ones may migrate to a well developed nation in order to grab the lucrative opportunities provided by rich countries.
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 in turn will hinder the growth of the native land, because they h
ave spend
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have spent
large money for the upbringing of the children.
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, many may have c
oncerned
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concerns
over relocating of their young ones into another nation. In conclusion, it can be inferred that despite the threat of their young men and women s
ettelling
a gradual sinking to a lower level
settling
set telling
sterling
to f
oreign
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a foreign country
country
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, I believe that government should provide excessive funding towards maturing their future generation to make their
country
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 a better place to live.
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