Man working people get little or no exercices either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. why do many working people not get enough exercise? what can be done about this problem?

Maintaining a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, proved to be difficult for working people.
Statistic
Suggestion
Statistics
show, that working people suffer from several health issues throughout
time
, due to lack of exercises either during their free
time
or
wroking
actively engaged in paid work
working
break. So what
prevent
Suggestion
prevents
is preventing
has prevented
employee
Suggestion
the employee
an employee
employees
from working out?
and
Suggestion
And
what can be done to answer
this
problem? Poor
time
management, is the
bigest
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
biggest
hindrance to maintain a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. Working people face great difficulty balancing
work
and adopting healthy habits like sport, which will
inavitably
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
inevitably
lead to
healthissues
Suggestion
health issues
such
as diabetes, blood pressure,
cardioviscular
of or pertaining to or involving the heart and blood vessels
cardiovascular
deseasesn
and obesity. Futhermore, heavy
work
load will eventually suck of the employee energy.
Thus
, after
work
, people are too tired to think or do
exercices
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
and barely manage to finish house
work
and taking care of the family.
Also
, it should be noted that,
inspite
Suggestion
in spite
of being able to include
exercice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
in their daily routine, people are not that motivated to
workout
Suggestion
work out
for two reasons namely: expensive gyms and lack of
exercices
Suggestion
exercise
exercises
places at home.
Nevertheless
, the
abovesaid
Suggestion
above said
is true, but no excuse is acceptable in regards of our health.
Wroking
Suggestion
Working
people can find innovative means to do some physical activities without
sacreficing
endure the loss of
sacrificing
their
time
, nor searching for the
adequat
having the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
adequate
place. It is more than enough to alter our routine, like walking to
work
or home
instead
of taking the bus, take the stairs and avoid elevators, or doing some minor workout during lunch breaks. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly believe that our health is important,
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
therefor
it is
mantadory
required by rule
mandatory
to maintain a good one and extends our
lifpspan
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifespan
to better enjoy our lives.

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