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Man working people get little or no exercices either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. why do many working people not get enough exercise? what can be done about this problem?

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Maintaining a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, proved to be difficult for working people.
Statistic
Suggestion
Statistics
 show, that working people suffer from several health issues throughout
time
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, due to lack of exercises either during their free
time
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 or
wroking
actively engaged in paid work
working
 break. So what
prevent
Suggestion
prevents
is preventing
has prevented
employee
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the employee
an employee
employees
 from working out?
and
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And
 what can be done to answer
this
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 problem? Poor
time
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 management, is the
bigest
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
biggest
 hindrance to maintain a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. Working people face great difficulty balancing
work
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 and adopting healthy habits like sport, which will
inavitably
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
inevitably
 lead to
healthissues
Suggestion
health issues
such
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 as diabetes, blood pressure,
cardioviscular
of or pertaining to or involving the heart and blood vessels
cardiovascular
deseasesn
Suggestion
 and obesity. Futhermore, heavy
work
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 load will eventually suck of the employee energy.
Thus
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, after
work
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, people are too tired to think or do
exercices
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
 and barely manage to finish house
work
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 and taking care of the family.
Also
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, it should be noted that,
inspite
Suggestion
in spite
 of being able to include
exercice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
 in their daily routine, people are not that motivated to
workout
Suggestion
work out
 for two reasons namely: expensive gyms and lack of
exercices
Suggestion
exercise
exercises
 places at home.
Nevertheless
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, the
abovesaid
Suggestion
above said
 is true, but no excuse is acceptable in regards of our health.
Wroking
Suggestion
Working
 people can find innovative means to do some physical activities without
sacreficing
endure the loss of
sacrificing
 their
time
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, nor searching for the
adequat
having the requisite qualities or resources to meet a task
adequate
 place. It is more than enough to alter our routine, like walking to
work
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 or home
instead
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 of taking the bus, take the stairs and avoid elevators, or doing some minor workout during lunch breaks. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly believe that our health is important,
therfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
therefor
 it is
mantadory
required by rule
mandatory
 to maintain a good one and extends our
lifpspan
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifespan
 to better enjoy our lives.

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