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The number of travel agencies which offer affordable tour packages in on rise. Is this a positive or negative development?

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One of the discussed issues nowadays is increasing in affordable tour packages which is offered by a group of
travel
 agencies. In my opinion,
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his is a positive development which can give a chance people to make journey a lot.
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known
 that travelling a lot of country has always developed people’s mental outlook.What I mean here that they meet other cultures,
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ife styles and etc. So a lot of
travel
 companies make o
pportunies
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
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for
them to take a
dvantages.
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advantage
Secondly
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t may lead to make easier your trip plans.Sometimes people can f
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face lots
of problems
such
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a commercial document showing that the holder is entitled to something (as to ride on public transportation or to enter a public entertainment)
ticket
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a hill that rises abruptly from the surrounding region; has a flat top and sloping sides
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travel
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an administrative unit of government
agencies
figure everything out
instead
 of them.
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other
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that wasting little money.I m
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people take profit from affordable tour packages with a little budget and they can save money for other plans. Another additional revenue that it allows an economy to develop a new f
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the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
of income.
Travel
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then
 take profits from it. İn conclusion,
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, I consider this
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a positive development overall because
travel
 agencies contribute people’s life with useful p
ackeges.
a collection of things wrapped or boxed together
packages
package

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