You recently attended a training course organised by a local community centre. You were very satisfied with the course and the support provided by the staff. Write a letter to the manager of the community centre. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Explain what you liked about the course and the service provided •Give some suggestions for improvement

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Ibrahim. I am writing
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letter to bring some comments to your attention about my
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experience in the tennis training course
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by the local community centre. First of all, I would like to thank you for the service provided as a resident of the community. It was a great experience for me to learn how to play tennis at the centre, enabling me to acquire a new ability. The staff are so professional that they teach us every detail of the tennis sport, and they make every step easier for us. When I joined the class, I felt very comfortable with the equipment, which is free.
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, there is a problem I faced during my night training sessions: the light lamps are insufficient to illuminate the whole area. It makes playing a match harder
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. I kindly request that the lamps be changed for more powerful ones. I would really appreciate it if you could make
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change for our convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your response. Best regards, Ibrahim

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Overall score: 7. Say a little more about why the staff support was good. For example, say how they helped you before or after class.
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Your first sentence says you want to give comments, but most of the letter is thanks. Start more clearly by saying you are writing to thank the centre and give one suggestion.
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Use a clearer link between the good points and the problem. For example: “However, I have one suggestion for the evening classes.”
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Some sentences are long. Make them shorter so the meaning is easier to follow. For example, split the sentence about the staff into two sentences.
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You cover all three parts: who you are, what you liked, and one way to make the course better.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main part, and end. “First of all” and “Secondly” help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear job: good points first, then the problem and your request.
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