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Developed countries have created many environmental problem. what can be done to have reduce the dangers of global warming?

#countries #dangers
Firstly
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Firstly, this
this
 is very important to understand the basic reason of
this
 difficulty.In well developed nations people always want more advancements in terms of technology
,
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,
feasibility and money.
For instance
, a large
nmber
the property possessed by a sum or total or indefinite quantity of units or individuals
number
 of industries
(
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(
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
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E
 chemical
,
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,
Sguar
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Sugar
 Mills
,
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,
plansts etc
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plants, etc.
plansts etc.
plants etc.
plants etc
) has been established from long time ago. Demand of
vehicle
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the vehicle
have been increased
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has been increased
 drastically with the passage of time due to which more plants have been
setup
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set up
 and more and more automobile
have been produced
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has been produced
 over the past year.
This
 causes more
polloution
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
polluting
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
their
in or at that place
there
 is not
significant check
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a significant check
 on plants and industries.With the increased of
population
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populated
 forests have been cut down and converted into cities due to
whhich
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 air pollution increased very rapidly.Tree quantities have been reduced
continusly
at every point
continuously
 due to which, Oxygen level decreases.
This
 can
casuse
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
 adverse consequence which is known as GLOBAL WARMING.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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