large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear sirs, I am writing in relation to the possibility of

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sponsorship. I would argue the positive facts to spend a little amount of money on a minor's children

sport

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team.

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there aren't many alternatives to

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any sports in

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town. Thanks to the peak of birth in few years, there are more kids

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before, it is necessary to create spaces for their well-being. In particularly for children aged 4-6 I propose a project with a duration of two years, that would

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a course for beginners and a course for amateurs. A lot of parents ask

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this

type of service and would have been ready to spend money for the health of their kids.

Morover

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, I would explain some

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derived from the choice of supporting our events: we plan to have two open-air

concert

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, previously crowded.

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in Spring, it would be the Tulipan Band whose play pop music. Their concerts are very amazing and

colorful

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, people will dancing night over. Their melodies are celestial, nobody will ask us to turn off the music. It could be

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that it will be a presence of 10000 persons, at least.

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an other

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concert in Summer, but it will be a rap music concert. It is thinkable that it will be 25000 persons. For

this

event

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it

wil

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be prepared a buffet for

prominents

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. The spectators could

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a meeting with the stars of the moment and, when they want, they could

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backstage. We have a lot of

feedbacks

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, good opinions for the organization "Patty Party" on Facebook and Instagram page, you shall read it. The most valuable investment, in my opinion, could be the entertainment activity. Likely there are going to be a high presence of tourists one's for these two concerts.

This

is an important occasion to invest smartly. Faithfully Sarah