Too much emphasis is placed on going university for academic education. People should be encouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack of qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays life is complexion, there are plenty of pressure that's put on children in their educational journey. Almost every parent wanted their children can achieve the highest academic
education
in university and can get a good
job
as well as high
salary
. They would recommend their children do some qualified jobs,
such
as doctors, accountancies or lawyers. That's why they are lacking of qualified tradespeople
such
as electricians or plumbers due to studying the difference in academic educations. I, personally, am strongly agree that people should be encouraged to do vocational training about electrical or plumbing in case that they need. People are now chasing with higher
education
for a good
job
as well as higher
salary
. They believe that higher
education
is, higher
salary
they can get into the dream
job
. Due to tradespeople just study about how they are going to sell things and some stuffs of being a business, but not studying some stuffs about electricity and plumbing.
That is
why we are suggesting and encouraging people
besides
just studying their main knowledge, but
also
need to study some kind of electrical knowledge to help them in solving their daily problems.
In addition
, our society actually needs more people doing some vocational training as we are lacking of it. One way to encourage people to study
this
kind of
education
is that the
job
's
salary
should be as high as other jobs. In conclusions, any jobs need to be respected as we are doing our dream jobs so do not be shamed on the
job
that you like just because they do not recognise the
job
or just basically the
job
doesn't have a high
salary
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vocational training
  • Skilled tradespeople
  • Job market
  • Financial burden
  • Traditional four-year university
  • Local economy
  • Stigma
  • Subsidies
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Mainstream education system
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