It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important.

Increasing population feels that animals are used by humans for multiple purpose and that it should be stopped.
On the other
hand
, several people
also
believe that animals are required for various human
needs including
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needs, including
nutrition, travel and
research
work. Use of animals for human needs has been in the ecosystem from the very early period and that it continues till today, but the extent of exploitation has been increased.
This
has resulted in concern among a
number
of people. Human needs animal for several
purpose
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purposes
that benefits not only humans but
also
animals. To maintain the balance of the nature the use of animals is very much required by humans. Exploitation of animals at the
hand
of humans has increased profoundly compared to
early period
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an early period
. Animals are being increasingly used for
research
for extremely harmful products that results in taking their life. Since animals are readily available for testing,
company
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the company
instead
of spending money in making their
research
better
first
experiment on
animals thereby
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animals, thereby
giving them serious injuries that can even
amount to death
Suggestion
amount to a death
. Again
,
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,
since some countries banned the killing of milk giving animals, their owner
first
use them for milk and once they are old enough not to give any more milk, they are left on
road
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the road
a road
without any
further
care. These animals are
then
seen dying in accidents or because of hunger.
Thus
, it has been found that
exploitation
Suggestion
the exploitation
of animals has become increasingly common and easier for humans and that they should be restricted in doing the same.
On the other
hand
, the natural ecosystem has been made in a way that makes
animals
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animal
animals'
food for humans.
Human body
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The human body
needs a
number
of necessary nutrition that comes from animals. Apart from
this
, animals are
also
required as
mode
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a mode
of
transportation particularly
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transportation, particularly
in places where motorized vehicles cannot be used. A
number
of medicines that are being developed through
research
requires it to be tested on animals in order to find their
effect
Suggestion
effectiveness
and success of humans.
This
is required to find
cure
Suggestion
cures
for a
number
of life-threatening diseases.
Thus
, animals have and will always remain and important part of human needs as well as for several other
purpose
Suggestion
purposes
. Even though we agree that animals get exploited at the
hand
of humans and that it should be reduced if not eliminated, but we
also
have to agree that human-animal relation or interaction form an important part of the natural ecosystem. To maintain the development and to support the growing population, along with maintaining the natural cycle, human needs to continue the use of
animals but
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animals, but
in judicious
lacking or showing lack of judgment or discretion; unwise
injudicious
way so as to not to make any of them extinct.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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