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Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The maps illustrate the Grange
park
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's previous structure in 1920 and recent view of that
park
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. Overall, the
park
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 retains the major elements of flowers,
music place
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music, place
, sitting space, and entrance.
Converesely
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Conversely
, a few things reintroduce in the garden, which are cafe and
child's
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children's
play ground
an area where many people go for recreation
playground
. In the 1920, a stage for
astist
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 was located west side of the
park
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, and some seats situated in both
corner
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corners
 of the north and south.
Next
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, those replaced by the Amphitheatre for concerts with audiences place in recent days.
Besides
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, there was a fountain found in the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of the visiting place. Which converted by the rose garden, and bunches of seats build for the people currently.
Similarly
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, in the north and east corner, there was a pond Located
in
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at
 1920. Which, reconstructed to kiddies
zoon
in the near future
soon
, and a cafe rebuilt beside it.
In
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On
 the west side the greenhouse vanished, and a
wathe
worthy of being treated in a particular way
worth
wave
 feature constructed for increasing
beauty
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the beauty
.
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, an entrance reintroduced with car parking on the corner of the east and south.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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