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happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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Life, nowadays become very hectic and difficult to live in most part of the place. People are living in poverty and in
such
 circumstances which make life harder.
However
, these problems can be catered by
happiness
, but sometimes, it
become
Suggestion
becomes
 difficult to understand the mode of
happiness
. In
this
 essay I will discuss some points to achieve
this
. Due to industrialization and busy schedule people tends to forget about themselves. They got used to with the approach of industry to work for 9 to 10 hours with many tons of tasks and assignments to complete before deadline
subsequently
, which make people leave their habit of healthy
lifestyle
 that, plays a vital role in
happiness
. A healthy
lifestyle
also make people to
Suggestion
also makes people
also makes people to
 live longer
furthermore
, it develops a state
to
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of
 mind by which a person feels more optimistic. If one becomes more optimistic he tends to achieve things more easily and happily.
However
, individuals don't know to define
this
 state of mind as feelings are harder to define
by
Suggestion
with
 words.
Furthermore
, helping others and to do welfare of needy people
also
 helps a person
to fell
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to feel
to felt
feel
 the sense of achievement like, we can take an example of Abdul Sattar Edhi, who helped the poor, handicapped, orphans and those parents whose children closes the door for them. Edhi helped all these people without earning a penny and lived a back-driven
lifestyle
 yet, happily. In conclusion, A
lifestyle
 with sort of
happiness
 in it becomes, easier to live rather than a life which has nothing to be optimistic or any sort of achievement in it.
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