The chart below shows the change in three different types of crime in Newport city center from 2003 to 2012
The line graph displays the changing
number
of three different crime
incidents
in Newport city centre within ten years.
Overall
, the number
of incidents
of burglary
decreased significantly throughout the whole period while
stealing cars and theft
from person incidents
just changed slightly and seem stable especially robbery. Moreover
, the huge reduction of
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burglary
crime
incident
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incidents
crime
rate order in the mid of 2006.
From 2003 to mid-2006, number
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the number
crime
incidents
that happened to households was the highest among the other two and reached the highest point ever in the recording period at approximately 3700 times in 2004 while
the number
of car theft
incidents
, as can be seen as the second
lowest crime
incident in this
presentation, dipped slightly as well as
the overall
trend of robbery which was the lowest crime
incident that occurred in this
city seem quite stable.
In 2004, the incidents
of burglary
went down dramatically and hit its
lowest at about 1200 times in 2008 making Correct pronoun usage
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the
car Correct article usage
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theft
came up as the first crime
incidents
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incident
happened
in the city since mid-2006. After 2008, the Correct pronoun usage
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number
of robbery incidents
and also
burglary
,
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while
the car theft
rate rose gradually and finally
reached 2600 in 2012 which is just a hundred lower than its first-year record in 2013.Submitted by rodridthanawat on
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