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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that raising children is critical to their future, and parents should b
e in careful
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preparation. Personally, I disagree with the idea that all mothers and fathers should be forced into taking parenting lessons. There are several drawbacks of putting parents under compulsion to learn parenting skills.
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, most parents do not have enough time to participate in raising child classes. Many people who have hectic schedules cannot attend regularly parenting classes.
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, the t
raining childcare
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training, childcare
skills program for parents would be disrupted.
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 could lead to an adverse effect on caring for children.
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, parenting classes may not offer effective parenting methods for every family. Each child has a different personality and a family background so parents have their own ways to teach and raise their children.
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 of going to parenting classes, parents should consider the following options.
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, parents can ask the older generation for advice. Grandparents who already have considerable experience i
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raising children can help young parents in parenting whenever they are in need of guidance and support.
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, it is important for parents to spend time with their children. Getting to know their child by talking and doing activities with them is more effective than spending time in these classes.
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, parents can look for information and handy tips for raising children in books or on the Internet. In conclusion, I disagree that we should force parents into having childcare courses because of the problems and the availability of better measures.

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