The number of older people is increasing. Some people think it will cause problem to their countries; others believe that this group is important to the society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

As the time passes by, people who used to be young and energetic, are becoming old and weak, which
also
increasing the numbers of older people. Some believe that these people are just a burden on the
society
while
other
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the other
believes that
such
old- age people can play a vital role in reshaping the
society
, morally and culturally. In
this
essay I will address both of the points and will give my perception
on
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of
it. Some people claim that the increasing quantity of older people will make a country over crowded and doesn't help to build the economy as well, because they got retired from their respective jobs and now just earning pensions from the Government, which could have been
spend
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spent
in building the economy and other requirements of young generation more efficiently.
Furthermore
, they
also
believe that
such
people will not let the
society
and the
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
of young generations
to grow
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grow
, as they got
sticked
caught or fixed
stuck
with their old
believes
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
and cultures. They don't let their children or
grand children
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
to think of their own and decide their future by themselves according to their experience, which may not help in
this
era
additionally
, they are lacking behind in the use of various technologies and don't prefer to accept the change, which technologies bring.
However
, masses
also
believe
in contrast
of all other people that, these people may reshape the
society
, which has gone into wrong path, as many children use to live with their grand parents and their lifestyles greatly impact the way of living for kids in their future
subsequently
, they may get plethora of useful skills from their grand parent's experiences and can learn from their mistakes in life, like I usually get advice from my grand mother on various issues of my life and those advices really helped me in those problems, another advantages of grand parents is that, they may
also
keep a greater check on their grand children, when their parents are busy in their work. To conclude, I believe that having old people in
this
society
is a blessing for young generations like us
,
Accept space
,
because we can share our problems and can get advice from their experiences, regarding the life of today's world.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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