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The number of older people is increasing. Some people think it will cause problem to their countries; others believe that this group is important to the society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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As the time passes by, people who used to be young and energetic, are becoming old and weak, which
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 increasing the numbers of older people. Some believe that these people are just a burden on the
society
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 while
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the other
 believes that
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 old- age people can play a vital role in reshaping the
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, morally and culturally. In
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 essay I will address both of the points and will give my perception
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of
 it. Some people claim that the increasing quantity of older people will make a country over crowded and doesn't help to build the economy as well, because they got retired from their respective jobs and now just earning pensions from the Government, which could have been
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spent
 in building the economy and other requirements of young generation more efficiently.
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, they
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 believe that
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 people will not let the
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 and the
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
 of young generations
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grow
, as they got
sticked
caught or fixed
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 with their old
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any cognitive content held as true
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 and cultures. They don't let their children or
grand children
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
 to think of their own and decide their future by themselves according to their experience, which may not help in
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 era
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, they are lacking behind in the use of various technologies and don't prefer to accept the change, which technologies bring.
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, masses
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 of all other people that, these people may reshape the
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, which has gone into wrong path, as many children use to live with their grand parents and their lifestyles greatly impact the way of living for kids in their future
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, they may get plethora of useful skills from their grand parent's experiences and can learn from their mistakes in life, like I usually get advice from my grand mother on various issues of my life and those advices really helped me in those problems, another advantages of grand parents is that, they may
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 keep a greater check on their grand children, when their parents are busy in their work. To conclude, I believe that having old people in
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 is a blessing for young generations like us
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 because we can share our problems and can get advice from their experiences, regarding the life of today's world.
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