You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the meneger of the nearest private sports club. In your letter × introduce yourself × say why you are interested in this sports club × ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask

information

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for information

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about

Muborak

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the Muborak

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Sports

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club

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Club

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I am planning to attend soon. I am Sevinch Muxtorova and I have just started a course

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a college. In

this

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college

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college,

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I can learn other languages

such

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as Korean, Russian and so on. I heard that

this

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sports

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club

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exceed

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more expensive

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than other

sports

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club

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clubs

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this

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city.

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, in college that I am studying recently has no

sports

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facilities, that's why I am interested in

this

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club

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. I like

sport

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and

sport

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is my thing. It will be

great

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experience for me if I

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this

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club

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sport

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entertainment

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and it keeps us healthy.

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, it

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the

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apply

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stress,

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, when I am in stress, I do

sport

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. There are

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a vareity

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vareity

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variety

of things I want to know about your

sports

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club

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. What kind of facilities have in your

club

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and how much

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do I

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have to pay in a month? Please tell me about it and is it alright if I know how many

member

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members

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has

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are

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club

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the club

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. If there are so many people, I believe that,

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club

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is great. I look forward to hearing from you! I would appreciate it if you could inform me as soon as possible. You could send the above-mentioned information to my e-mail or a fax. Yours faithfully, Sevinch Muxtorova

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task response

Ensure that you review and correct minor grammatical issues and improve sentence fluency. For example, 'I am writing to ask information about Muborak Sports club I am planning to attend soon.' could be 'I am writing to inquire about the Muborak Sports Club, which I am planning to join soon.'

coherence and cohesion

Organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a single concept. This improves readability and logical flow.

task response

Use a consistent formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid phrases that may come across as too casual, such as 'sport is my thing.' Instead, you could say 'I am very passionate about sports.'

task response

The letter includes all the necessary information as per the instructions in the prompt: introduction, reason for interest, and specific questions about the club.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing are well-formulated and appropriate for a formal letter.

coherence and cohesion

The main ideas are clear and logically ordered, which enhances coherence and cohesion.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

227 words

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