You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the meneger of the nearest private sports club. In your letter × introduce yourself × say why you are interested in this sports club × ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask
information
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for information
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about
Muborak
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the Muborak
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Sports
club
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Club
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I am planning to attend soon. I am Sevinch Muxtorova and I have just started a course
in
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at
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a college. In
this
college
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college,
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I can learn other languages
such
as Korean, Russian and so on. I heard that
this
sports
club
is
exceed
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more expensive
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than other
sports
club
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clubs
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in
this
city.
In addition
, in college that I am studying recently has no
sports
facilities, that's why I am interested in
this
club
. I like
sport
and
sport
is my thing. It will be
great
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a great
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experience for me if I
be
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am
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at
this
club
sport
is
entertainment
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entertaining
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and it keeps us healthy.
Also
, it
reliefs
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relieves
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the
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apply
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stress,
for example
, when I am in stress, I do
sport
. There are
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vareity
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variety
of things I want to know about your
sports
club
. What kind of facilities have in your
club
and how much
I
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do I
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have to pay in a month? Please tell me about it and is it alright if I know how many
member
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members
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has
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are
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in
club
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the club
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. If there are so many people, I believe that,
this
club
is great. I look forward to hearing from you! I would appreciate it if you could inform me as soon as possible. You could send the above-mentioned information to my e-mail or a fax. Yours faithfully, Sevinch Muxtorova
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task response
Ensure that you review and correct minor grammatical issues and improve sentence fluency. For example, 'I am writing to ask information about Muborak Sports club I am planning to attend soon.' could be 'I am writing to inquire about the Muborak Sports Club, which I am planning to join soon.'
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a single concept. This improves readability and logical flow.
task response
Use a consistent formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid phrases that may come across as too casual, such as 'sport is my thing.' Instead, you could say 'I am very passionate about sports.'
task response
The letter includes all the necessary information as per the instructions in the prompt: introduction, reason for interest, and specific questions about the club.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-formulated and appropriate for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
The main ideas are clear and logically ordered, which enhances coherence and cohesion.
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