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Some people believe that studying abroad is important because it expands a person's knowledge and understanding of the world. Others feel that it is better to study at home because that is the best way to prepare for a career in the student's own country. Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

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In
this
 world, many people
believes
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believe
 that pursuing education outside the own
country
 may give more skills and others thinks that studying at own place is
the good
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the best
the better
best
better
way
 to build our
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
careers
. In my point of you both the
way
 can have many advantages and disadvantages in it. We will discuss more about each
ideas
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idea
. The students who are studying abroad have definitely
increase
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increased
 in a skill set and
also
 they will become more creative compared to home
country
 and it
also
 depends on the which
country
 you choose.
Likewise
,
the
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The
 people who are
studing
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
standing
 in a
country
 like USA
,
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,
CANADA and London
,
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,
 their education system is well structured and make the person to think and learn
on
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about
 the creative things.
For example
, the
country
 like INDIA they have less practical knowledge rather than having a book knowledge. So, studying in foreign countries
make them to develop
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to make them develop
 their knowledge and become more and more practical. The person who
are carrying
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is carrying
carries
 their studies in the home
country
also have
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also has
 some advantages. They are well comfortable with the native
language
 of teaching and home
country
language
 friends who helps people to explain in easy ways.So,
this
 makes people to study properly and
also
 make them to understand as quickly as they can.
For example
, the student takes less time to understand the concept explained by the native
language
 than
foreign
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a foreign language
language
. So
,
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,
for
this
sake studing
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sake, standing
sake standing
 in own
country
maketh
engage in
makes
 a person more understandable too. To conclude that, the both
way
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ways
 of studying has own advantages and
disadvantages but
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disadvantages, but
 the
effecctive
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most effective
effective
way
 of studying is
to be select
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selected
 a proper
country
 as well as
university
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university, then
then
 comes a scope of the field which impacts a
people
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person
 to grow and shine in their
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
careers
carrier
 and to come out with the flying colours.
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