Some people think that teenagers should be required to do community service in their free time as this would benefit both the individual teenagers and their society. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The aim of
this
essay is to discuss some of the prominent issues related to student's community service after
schooltime
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school time
.
Firstly
, the essay will explain advantages for the
volonteer
tell voluntarily
volunteer
volunteers
and will illustrate the significance of helping other persons for the well-
beeing
the state or fact of existing
being
in society. From my point of view, I go along with the topic in force of the
deed whether
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deed, whether
unpaid voluntary work is
undertook
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undertaken
seriously, it
allow
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allows
a steady satisfaction.
For instance
, taking care of elderly people, the teenager could realize the state of mind of some older relatives, so as to learn to interact in a better way with
their
objective case of they
them
. In a nutshell, volunteering
acktivities
any specific behavior
activities
developes
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develop
develops
developed
developers'
abilities how empathy, a crucial competence to spend in the job market.
In other words
, to bring a personal example, I worked as service costumer assistant for 9 years, from 2012 until 2017.
This
type of job
have changed
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has changed
my way of approaching people not only in the workplace but
also
in my whole life. Currently, I am kindly directed, to some extent. I
am became
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am become
am becoming
have become
finer in interactions with other people afterwards a discussion with a client. He told me not to look at him like that and I didn't understand how I would have been looking
to
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for
at
him. Only later, I realized that maybe I may have had a grim look. From that moment on I promised myself to pay more attention to the emotional needs of
costumer
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the costumer
the customer
costumers
, without placing my personal
fellings
emotional or moral sensitivity (especially in relation to personal principles or dignity)
feelings
failings
feeling
before. I haven't never had
this
kind of problems with
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
people, indeed my job has become easier. In conclusion, to have the opportunity to help needy people, enter in contact with their emotional perceptions, makes smarter emotionally, and
this
enable
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enables
one's work more competitive.

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