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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money . Write a letter to the local council . In your letter Guve details of how you and your friends or family use the centre . Explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community . Describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes.

#council #sports #leisure #centre #money #guve #friends #community #effects #people
Dear
sir
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, I am
writting
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writing
this
 letter to express my disregard concerning
decision
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the decision
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 to close
centre
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the centre
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for saving
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 money.
Firstly
 ,the sports and leisure centre is extremely
convinient
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convenient
 for all families and friends. Almost more than 80% of youngsters use them by playing various sports and spending weekends.
However
 , there are sections for
middle
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the middle
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agr
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age
 population to relax by watching
cinema
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the cinema
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 in theatres. Apart from that,
kids
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kids'
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 games , gardens ,
the
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overall
enviornment
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environment
 make it more homely and relaxing.
Moreover
 ,
although
 it is
convinient
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convenient
 apart from that , it is like a mind refreshment.
Full
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 week after a hectic schedule , people are
stree
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stress
 free enjoying their own time and interests . It
also
 helps
individual
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individuals
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 to remain fit mentally and physically . The possible effects of its closure could result in
lack
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a lack
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 of communication , affecting relationships . Even
childrens
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children
children's
focus would be more diverted for studies.
However
 , it would affect their health
due to
more
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a more
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 sedentary lifestyle . I hope
,
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apply
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you will address
this
 concern as soon as possible . Thanking you . Yours sincerely Ms . Jutika
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