Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs in order to save money . Write a letter to the local council . In your letter Guve details of how you and your friends or family use the centre . Explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community . Describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes.

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letter to express my disregard concerning

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to close

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money.

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,the sports and leisure centre is extremely

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for all families and friends. Almost more than 80% of youngsters use them by playing various sports and spending weekends.

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population to relax by watching

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in theatres. Apart from that,

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overall

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make it more homely and relaxing.

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it is

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apart from that , it is like a mind refreshment.

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week after a hectic schedule , people are

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free enjoying their own time and interests . It

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to remain fit mentally and physically . The possible effects of its closure could result in

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of communication , affecting relationships . Even

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focus would be more diverted for studies.

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sedentary lifestyle . I hope

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concern as soon as possible . Thanking you . Yours sincerely Ms . Jutika

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