Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Among other prominent changes that 21st century has brought with it, one of the highly debated topic is w
omen
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women's
rights. Now that the right of equal opportunities for female gender is being accepted at different international forums, some people suggest that equal numbers of students from
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sexes
should be accepted by the universities in each discipline. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
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will be analysed by looking at fairness of quota system and analysis of
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the job market
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.
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, reserving a certain
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of female intakes for each course would essentially lead to a quota system which is notorious for discouraging merit, whether it is a
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market
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or
education
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admission. As oppose to open merit which ensures that o
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only candidates
the only candidate
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higher
marks gets enrolled, the quota system negates any
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right and gives undue preference to another candidate on the basis of gender only.
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, as per most recent statistics issued by Higher
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Commission, around 75% of recent admissions in higher
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represents male students and opposite sex accounts for only 25% of
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admission.
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, it can be seen that i
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the introduction
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a fixed number
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of seats for females would negate fair competition among students. On o
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the other hand
the equal reflection of each sex in university
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does not necessarily means that the same proportion follows in the jobs.
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can be exemplified by the analysis conducted by University of Health S
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Sciences, which
suggests that in 2019, “medical
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to
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the job
ratio is only 30% for female s
tudents which
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students, which
means that
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of female p
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physicians, which
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after completing their studies is f
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less
when compared with their male counterparts where
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ratio is 95%.
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, any gap created by non-employment of
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section of female m
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members'
results into loss of economic output for the national economy as well as l
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a limited supply
of qualified staff for jobs.
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, ensuring f
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a fix number
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of
both
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gender might create disruption in
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the job market
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and have negative impact on different segments of society. In conclusion,
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promoting
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among f
emale section
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the female section
of society might have far reaching e
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effects
for a country on
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national and international levels, fixing a
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of female seats may deter competition and have n
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a negative effect
on
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the job market
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. In my opinion, universities should provide and ensure equal opportunities for
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genders without any preference.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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