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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Being a
parent
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 is a duty that most of people will experience during their life. There is an arguable that for being a superb
parents
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parent
 some inner behaviour should be learnt from earlier grades of
school
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. I completely agree that indispensable skills for being an especial
parent
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 should be taught from primary
school
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.
This
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 essay will
aiso
in addition
also
 illustrate some features of an ideal
parent
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. There is a belief that essential skills for being a lovely
parent
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 in
future
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the future
 should be
practice
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practiced
practicing
 from prior ages of life.I believe that key virtues should be taught through
events
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the events
 of life from rudimentary grade of
school
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, so that they can will be practiced day in day out and eventually they will penetrate to our mindset and behaviour.
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, the fundamental of being a proper
parent
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 is being a good human and have a
sens
a general conscious awareness
sense
 of
symapthy
sharing the feelings of others (especially feelings of sorrow or anguish)
sympathy
 for others.
there
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There
 are several skills that an individual should learn include tolerance,
responsility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
, financial savvy and awareness.
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, a
parent
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 should be tolerant in confronting of their
childeren's
a young person of either sex
children
 mistakes and hand in several solution calmly without any
strughles
an energetic attempt to achieve something
struggles
 to rectify their mistakes.
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, parents should
also
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 be responsible and try to do best their tasks.
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, they need to be intelligent in financial
subjectsand
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subjects and
 prepare a comfortable condition for their offsprings so that they a
care free
free of trouble and worry and care
carefree
 childhood. The
last
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 but not least, they should recognize their
chideren's
a young person of either sex
children
 situations and find out their mood previous talking to them.
there
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There
are
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is
 more range of considerations
such
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 as to
be friend
become friends with
befriend
, have a thicker skin about their
childeren's ciritics
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children, critics
children ciritics
children critics
childeren's critics
childeren's critic
 or not being prejudice and so on that can not fit
to
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into
this
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 essay. In conclusion, It seems to me that being a lovely
parent
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 needs some skills
such
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 as
perceptive
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perception
, well informed and more other virtues that they should be institutionalized from
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first grade
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the first grade
 of
school
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.
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