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In some countries it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow vegetarian diets. Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages.

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The number of people following vegetarian food is becoming more and more common in certain nations.
This
 essay thinks that the benefits of following vegetarian diets
outweighs
Suggestion
outweigh
 the drawbacks because,
although
 many people may not enjoy some specific types of meals, it prevents them from falling sick. The main disadvantage is that people will not enjoy foods like burgers, meat and pizza due to the increase in people following vegetarian diets.
This
 is because they would have to adhere to some restrictions on their eating habits and
also
 avoid eating fatty foods.
For example
, the Daily Health Magazine in Ghana reported in 2019 that, there was an increase in people following strict rules from their dieticians on their diets and
this
 prevented them from eating fatty foods. But
this
 essay would argue that the majority of people who tend to follow vegetarian meals once in a while eat pizza.
However
, there are some who believe that a lot of people adhering to vegan foods like vegetables, grains and fruits makes them healthy. One reason is that, they believe eating these foods prevents unwanted sicknesses which helps to keep their bodies fit.
For example
, the District hospital in Kenya recorded a 2% decrease in kidney failure and heart disease between 2018 and 2019.
This
 was because a lot of people were on vegetarian diets which helped to improve their health.
Therefore
, it is obvious that without these vegetarian diets, health issues will increase among people. In conclusion,
although
 it is unfortunate people cannot enjoy certain types of meals they want to eat because they are vegetarians, it prevents them from unwanted illness and
that is
 the only thing that keeps them healthy.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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