Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A society is built from learning through past experiences. People had to look back and realize what had happened, and

also

what went wrong and what went right to try not repeat

bad behavior

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the bad behaviour

bad behaviour

or bad decisions. Look back is essential for people to build a strong society, with good values and principles.

However

, some young people

seems

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seem

not to be interested in learning from other experiences. When a person

experienced

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has experienced

some difficult situations, they have the opportunity to learn from

this

how to solve these problems and try do not commit the same mistakes again, and can teach people that have the same issue as well.

For instance

, when a father tries to teach his

son

about how important is

study

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studying

hard to reach a university, he can use his example, explaining to his

son

how important and necessary

is wakes

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has woken

is woken

up early, pay attention during the classes, do the homework every day, and get good scores in school in order to be accepted

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great Universities. He

wishs

hope for; have a wish

wishes

wish

that his

son

have

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has

better choices than him have made. In the

past he

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past, he

did not take study so

serious

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seriously

and unfortunately did not get the school of his dreams. He tries to pass his bad experience to his

son

, because he has already had the experience and is aware of

consequences

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the consequences

from

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his acts.

Nevertheless

, some teenagers are not worried about the future. They just want to think about the present and what they have to do to have fun.

Therefore they

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Therefore, they

find that they do not need to look back and

overthink

all things

everything

the past. Acting

this

way, they do not understand how important is the past in our present, and some of them ended up to repeat the same mistakes as their parents or relatives did.

For example

a male teenager that had a parent dead because of the

cigarrets

finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking

cigarettes

and begin to smoke, regardless the bad experience lived

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with

his parent. Sometimes teenagers are so inconsequent and do not think that bad things could really happen

with

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them. In my

opinion the

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opinion, the

past influence everything that we are nowadays. We need to learn about the past to figure out how to change our future. It is imperative to learn how people did things, their results and how we can do it in a better manner to build a more comfortable future.

Besides

, when we learn from others experiences we can cut paths in our lives and

hence

can achieve our goals faster and with more success.

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In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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