Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A society is built from learning through past experiences. People had to look back and realize what had happened, and
also
what went wrong and what went right to try not repeat
bad behavior
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the bad behaviour
bad behaviour
or bad decisions. Look back is essential for people to build a strong society, with good values and principles.
However
, some young people
seems
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seem
not to be interested in learning from other experiences. When a person
experienced
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has experienced
some difficult situations, they have the opportunity to learn from
this
how to solve these problems and try do not commit the same mistakes again, and can teach people that have the same issue as well.
For instance
, when a father tries to teach his
son
about how important is
study
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studying
hard to reach a university, he can use his example, explaining to his
son
how important and necessary
is wakes
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has woken
is woken
up early, pay attention during the classes, do the homework every day, and get good scores in school in order to be accepted
in
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at
great Universities. He
wishs
hope for; have a wish
wishes
wish
that his
son
have
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has
better choices than him have made. In the
past he
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past, he
did not take study so
serious
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seriously
and unfortunately did not get the school of his dreams. He tries to pass his bad experience to his
son
, because he has already had the experience and is aware of
consequences
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the consequences
from
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of
his acts.
Nevertheless
, some teenagers are not worried about the future. They just want to think about the present and what they have to do to have fun.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
find that they do not need to look back and
overthink
all things
everything
the past. Acting
this
way, they do not understand how important is the past in our present, and some of them ended up to repeat the same mistakes as their parents or relatives did.
For example
a male teenager that had a parent dead because of the
cigarrets
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarettes
and begin to smoke, regardless the bad experience lived
by
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with
his parent. Sometimes teenagers are so inconsequent and do not think that bad things could really happen
with
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to
them. In my
opinion the
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opinion, the
past influence everything that we are nowadays. We need to learn about the past to figure out how to change our future. It is imperative to learn how people did things, their results and how we can do it in a better manner to build a more comfortable future.
Besides
, when we learn from others experiences we can cut paths in our lives and
hence
can achieve our goals faster and with more success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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