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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make. Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Recently,
technology
 has changed the way people communicate with each other.
This
 essay will
first
 discuss that the use of mobile phones to communicate is one of the ways
technology
 has affected the relationships of people and I believe
this
 has become a positive development because it keeps families and friends
moreclose
Suggestion
more close
. The use of
technology
such
 as
smartphones to
Accept comma addition
smartphones, to
 communicate is one of the many ways it has affected interactions with each other.
This
 is because, the availability of mobile phones has made it easier for families and loved ones to check up on each other on
daily basis
Suggestion
a daily basis
 and to know how each other is faring.
For example
, In 2019, the Daily Graphic in Ghana reported that the rate at which people used mobile phones to communicate has increased by 4% due to the existence of
technology
.
This
 was because people were now using text messages and phone calls to communicate with families and friends. In my opinion,
this
 has become a positive development because communication brings people in relationships together. One reason is that, when people communicate more often, they become more attached to each other which brings them joy and happiness in their relationship.
For example
, it was very difficult for my family to communicate with each other because we lived
at
Suggestion
in
 different places which made us worry a lot, but due to the existence of
technology
, the relationship between us has become
more strong
Suggestion
stronger
 because we always have conference video calls to see ourselves which tend out to be fun. In conclusion, the use of
technology
such
 as phones has affected the way people communicate in relationships and I believe
this
 is a good development because of the togetherness it brings to people in relationships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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