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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: • suggest someone who deserves the reward • mention what they have done to help the community • say what reward you would like to give this person

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Dear Sir/ Madam, My
name
 is Francis Peter. I read the news
in
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 your supplementary page, regarding
about
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the reward for
community
 support
people
. On
this
occasion
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 I am suggesting our parish priest
name
 for it. His
name
 is Fr. Chris Rob and currently he is the vicar in St. Mary’s Cathedral Church, Melbourne. Fr. Chris is doing a
lot
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 charity work
of
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 the parish
Community
. For the
last
 2
years
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 he had done a fundraiser for helping poor
people
 in India. He collects the money from parish
people
 and church visitors. He made a charity clothing bin near the church and request
people
 donate some used clothes for the poor
people
. Once
in
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a year he visits India and
stay
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 with
poor
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the poor
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community
. As a
reward
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 if you give some valuable money,
then
 he would use that for the same charity support.
Also
, if you mention his
name
 in the newspaper regarding his
community
 work, would be a great appreciation for him. Thank you for your attention. Regards,
Tibin
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Tobin
Tabin
 Peter
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