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IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrated how many car thefts
which
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happened
with
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per thousand vehicles and
this
 graph was searched by different four countries
in
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between 1990 to 1999. We can clearly
seen
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 that Great
Britian
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Britain
had
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fluctuate
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shape
 of
graph
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also
in
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Sweden illustrated
increasing
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shape
 and
another countries
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France
 and Canada had
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shape
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 too. In 1990,
Britian
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Britain
 already had
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large
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a large
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 gap with others.
In
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 that time in
France
 and Canada had figures between 5 and 10 against
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Great
Britian
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Britain
 had almost 20. In detail, Great
Britian
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Britain
was
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suddenly decreased shortly between 1992 and 1993. And it increased sharply until
middle
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 of 1996 and 1997 and after that time, it reached a peak
as
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 20 too. In 1991, there
was
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the same
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same
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some
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 figures
with
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 Swedennand
France
than
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then
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 they
splited
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with
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 two.
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 that time
France
 peaked
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 8 and after, it showed
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shape
.
On the other hand
, after 1991, Sweden increased gradually and peaked
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 highest figure in 1999. In Canada, it peaked
it
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in 1990 and it decreased sharply between 1991 and 1993 after that it increased gradually.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words britian, shape, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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