Those days, it seems that hosting a large international sporting competition, such as the Olympics or World Cup, is less about national pride and sports and more about money.Countries would therefore not spend billions on events and venues that mostly do not help them fix their real problems but only serve their politicians. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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Sports
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from the days of Greek Olympiads
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have
bought
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brought
people together to celebrate a
nation
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pride
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and strength.Competition
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the Olympics
or World Cup are organized not to solve the real issues
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it is the strategy of government to earn money.Over the past century or so
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however
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organized sports events have become political and corporate tools that overshadow the sports and athletes themselves and end up costing taxpayers billions of dollars that could be better spent elsewhere.Problems
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home less
without nationality or citizenship
homeless
is the major concern and need to be
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focused
to bring the
pride
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to the
nation
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. Hosts are usually
currupt
lacking in integrity
corrupt
corrupted
which set
wrong example
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the wrong example
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country's citizens
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the country's citizens
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essay will discuss that politicians need to set aside their own interests and focus their
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's budget on their citizens. Games are imperative to bring
pride
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to the
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if the
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is poor
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it is not worth to invest the money on
sports event
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a sports event
sports events
.A
country
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in which there are few or no homeless people
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for instance
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ought to be much more admired than one that spends billions of dollars on swimming pools and soccer stadiums, while the homeless are hidden away from the media.When one
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looks
at China
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as an illustration
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one will see that there are many poor farmers and others who can barely survive
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whereas the
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expenditure
that was used to host
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2008 Olympics is mostly in ruins and disuse.A
country
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that want to promote an image of strength can do so by supporting their
atheletes
a person trained to compete in sports
athletes
utilities
affiliates
and sending them to complete
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beyond or across the sea
overseas
while building homes and hospitals at home for their citizens. As for a
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pride
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too is questionable as it has become very clear that many of the world's biggest sporting organizations allot hosting
privelages
a special advantage or immunity or benefit not enjoyed by all
privileges
privilege
based on corruption and fraud.In some nations,in fact, the hosts even engage in violations of human rights in order to satisfy the needs of the sporting congolmerates,all
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