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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should be only allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that students who attend in universities ought to study in their interest majors, while others assume that fields which are more practical in the
future
 must be taught in universities. In my opinion, I believe that
although
 studying subjects
such
 as science and technology has some advantages, students can benefit studying their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 subjects. People who hold
this
 opinion that studying those subjects which students interested in is necessary claim that it can lead them to more success as students are being more motivated when they take part in their desire activities. So, a great deal of creativity and motivation which are
main principles
Suggestion
the main principles
 for being successful can be observed.
For
instance those
Accept comma addition
instance, those
 who are interested in Art may not become successful in Science. Nor will they experience many failures.
However
, others that emphasize on
benefits
Suggestion
the benefits
 of studying subjects that are more useful and significant for
future
Suggestion
the future, such
the future such
such
 as fields based on Science and Technology believe that it can make students more satisfied by increasing their job opportunities whereas many demanding jobs are in these areas. So, it can help students to apply for various jobs after graduation.
For example
 a local research has shown that
majority
Suggestion
the majority
a majority
 of IT (Information Technology) graduated people can find their fulfilling job as soon as they finish their university. In conclusion, While studying aspirations can lead students to more success by increasing creativity, studying more useful subjects can insure their
future
 jobs. In my opinion, despite
benefits
Suggestion
the benefits
 of following interests, students should study whatever is beneficial for their
future
 and society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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