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It is more important to invest in further education rather than to gain work experience after finishing university in order to find a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As the numbers of university graduates continue to increase, it can seem that there is no alternative but to continue one’s studies in order to be more attractive in the
job
market
, rather than to seek to gain practical work experience. To see how valid
this
 argument is, we have to look at both sides of the debate.
First
 of all, let’s take a look at the
first
 traditional route for university graduates. The main reason why people undertake an undergraduate degree is to give them a competitive edge in the
job
market
, as gaining a degree is seen a guarantee of a certain level of mental ability. It is
then
 seen as necessary to combine
this
 intellectual training with practical, real world work experience in order to become a viable and strong contender in the
job
market
. The alternative
view
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view, however
however
 argues that it is no longer enough merely to standard university degree and practical work experience. The sheer numbers of graduates entering the labour
market
 each year
means
Suggestion
mean
 that it is vital to gain an additional competitive edge when for the more sought after with selective. So where does the truth lie? On the one
hand there
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hand, there
 is the time honoured view that has long been the conventional and practical route to career success for young ambitious individuals.
On the other hand
, the view that the
job
market
 has never been more competitive and it is essential to aspire to much higher levels of competitive excellence.
With
Suggestion
To
 current lack of jobs available in the labour
market
 it seems inevitable that one has to gain additional qualifications which will prove to a potential employer that one is the right candidate for that very
job
.
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