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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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International
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 becomes one of the most important industries contribute the economic development of a nation. Though, it is argued that international
tourism
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 has led to conflict rather than understanding between people. In my opinion, I largely disagree with
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 statement because
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 problem can be solved. Each country always has its own cultures and traditions, so the conflicts between tourists and locals are often happening because lack of understanding of them.
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, in Vietnam, when Vietnamese people receive a gift, they will open it in the absence of the giver.
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 action shows politeness and respect. And in England, when British people receive a gift, they will open in front of the giver. Because according to them, they will express sincerity to the giver.
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,
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 plays a crucial role in building bridges between different cultures of the world.
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, when people come to other countries, they will explore and gain knowledge about traditions, languages, history…
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 is a good way to spread the cultures
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 the world and contribute to increasing the numbers of tourists. The growth of
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 industry not only helps economic development, but
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 helps attract foreign investment. The tension can be tackled easily. Tourists should raise awareness of the cultural diversity and so do the locals. Locals should not get into conflicts with tourists, they should help tourists understand the traditional cultures.
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 summary, it is clear that the
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 industry is an essential part of the economic growth of a country. In my opinion, the conflicts between tourists and locals is not complex and we absolutely settle it.
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