in recent years life has become more stressful than it has ever been, As a consequence more and more people are sifferig from stress-related pron[blmes.What factors are contributing to this increase and what do yout think can be done to overcome the current problems.

In
this
modern
world people
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world, people
are more prone to stress related illness like anxiety disorders and depressions rather than some systemic illness.
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essay will suggest that the leading causes of
this
issues
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issue
is that people are becoming overly attached to social networking sites and will
also
suggest solutions like
spending quality
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spending, quality
of their time on extracurricular activities and socialising as a viable solution followed by a reasoned conclusion. These days the popularity of using social media
are
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is
booming among all age groups of people.People are becoming more interested
on
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in
other people's lives
.
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Instagrams
and
facebooks
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Facebooks
facebook's
are examples of social platforms where people tend to compete with one another to flaunt their lavish lifestyles
,
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,
the flashy clothes
,
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,
expensive cuisines and extravagant vacations.
This
compelles
force somebody to do something
compelled
compiles
compels
the others to
overthink
turn from an upright or normal position
overturn
everything
that why they still lack those kind of
oppertunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
.
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.
They are overshadowed by others gimmicky appearances
on
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in
the social media and get worried because
life
had been so unfair to them. Problems and solutions
goes
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go
hand in hand.
Speding
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Spending
less time on the internet stalking on other people's
life
solves about half of our mental stresses
.
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.
For
example limitng
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example, limiting
example limiting
our indulgence in the internet and spending more time socialising with friends and family
,
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,
performing extra curricular activities like sports, meditating or reading a book helps us focus
in
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on
our
life
and stops us from comparing our
life
with others. In
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summary, in
todays fast-paced world more people are becoming mentally ill and depressed
as a result
of stress.
This
essay discussed how mental illness is caused by keeping ourselves busy on social media.
This
essay
also
suggested the solution to
this
prolem
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problem
as focusing more on our
life
than others and by spending and
on
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for
personal growth.
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