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in recent years life has become more stressful than it has ever been, As a consequence more and more people are sifferig from stress-related pron[blmes.What factors are contributing to this increase and what do yout think can be done to overcome the current problems.

#years #life #consequence #people #sifferig #pron[blmes #factors #yout
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world people
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world, people
 are more prone to stress related illness like anxiety disorders and depressions rather than some systemic illness.
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issue
 is that people are becoming overly attached to social networking sites and will
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spending, quality
 of their time on extracurricular activities and socialising as a viable solution followed by a reasoned conclusion. These days the popularity of using social media
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 booming among all age groups of people.People are becoming more interested
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 other people's lives
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Instagrams
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 and
facebooks
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Facebooks
facebook's
 are examples of social platforms where people tend to compete with one another to flaunt their lavish lifestyles
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,
the flashy clothes
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expensive cuisines and extravagant vacations.
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compelles
force somebody to do something
compelled
compiles
compels
 the others to
overthink
turn from an upright or normal position
overturn
everything
 that why they still lack those kind of
oppertunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
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They are overshadowed by others gimmicky appearances
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in
 the social media and get worried because
life
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 had been so unfair to them. Problems and solutions
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go
 hand in hand.
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Spending
 less time on the internet stalking on other people's
life
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 solves about half of our mental stresses
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 our indulgence in the internet and spending more time socialising with friends and family
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performing extra curricular activities like sports, meditating or reading a book helps us focus
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on
 our
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 and stops us from comparing our
life
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 with others. In
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summary, in
 todays fast-paced world more people are becoming mentally ill and depressed
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 of stress.
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 essay discussed how mental illness is caused by keeping ourselves busy on social media.
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 essay
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 suggested the solution to
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prolem
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problem
 as focusing more on our
life
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 than others and by spending and
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 personal growth.
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