Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

Competition is a common
occurence
an event that happens
occurrence
in life, especially at work. People tend to compete in almost everything. People with more experience tend to be hired more than those who just graduated or don't have experience. The problem with
this
is that, young professionals are not exposed to training so employers overlook them. If companies only hire experienced applicants, they are taking away the chance to train the younger ones. It is understandable that employers would rather have the insights of the older applicants as they won't spend time and money on training them and they would have a better understanding of the job than those who are newly graduates. But
this
would only lead to the younger generation having less and less training,
hence
decreased opportunity of getting hired. In conclusion, employers should not only look for
experience but
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the experience, but
the experience but
also
for enthusiasm and eagerness to actually learn the job. Hiring of fresh graduates
have
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has
risks but
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risks, but
it
also have
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also has
benefits like having a new perspective and being more trainable.

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