1. Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Recently, many
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
spend their time most on watching
television
rather than reading
book
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books
as a
resources
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resource
of their
education
.
In addition
, some people believe that make
quality
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the quality
of
education
children
nowadays become
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nowadays becomes
decrease. In my opinion, currently so many kinds of
television
show
offer not only
entertainment but
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entertainment, but
also
some knowledge to
increase
their
education
for
bani
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banning
itself. In
this
case, I believe it is depends on the children itself and their parent to guide them watching what kinds of
television
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television shows
the television show
a television show
show
. In
this
essay, I will describe some
point what
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point, what
kinds of
television
show
to make children gain for their
education
. Nowadays,
habit
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the habit
of reading books
become
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becomes
decrease time by time. Some people believe that will give impact quality of
education children
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education, children
become decline, most of
children
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the children
prefer
spend
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spending
their
times
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time
for watching T.V.
rather
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Rather
than revise their books. In
this
case, because of
television
offers many kinds of entertainment
show
,
for example
cartoon movies, singing competition, drama and so on rather than expose in terms of
education
.
In addition
, they believe that kinds of
show
can
increase
their profit and attract more people to watch and enjoy with.
However
, there are several
television
show
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shows
can
increase
children ability
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a child's ability
child's ability
the child's ability
children's ability
and help them to gain
knowlegde
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
,
such
as National Geographic or News. That
kinds
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kind
of
show
can improve
children capability
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the child's capability
child's capability
children's capability
like how to speak in proper
languange
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
or help them knowing some update from different country as well. In
this
case,
children parent
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the child's parent
child's parent
have
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has
to guide them to watching and learning some new things from what their watch and their hear from
television
.
Moreover
, watching
television
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television shows
a television show
show
with different language is the way help children to start
learn
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learning
new language
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a new language
,
for
example watching
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example, watching
news
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the news
with
English language
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the English language
is the best way to start learn English
it self
reflexive from of "it"
itself
. To sum up, watching
television
give bad impact for children in terms of
education
because that make them become lazy to
reading
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read
books,
however some
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however, some
of
television
show
also
help children
increase
their ability and knowledge.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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