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Band 4.5

In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of renting.

Globalisation has made travelling abroad or staying in a remote location far easier than ever before. If you are on a trip somewhere or planning to stay at a place for
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an indefinite
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time
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time,
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 it is always advantageous to
rent
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 a house rather than purchasing
one
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.
To begin
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 with, people these days like
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to change
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 every so often, which means changing where they stay for any particular amount of
time
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.
This
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 is easily possible because of the availability of
ready to
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ready-to-move-in
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move
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 in apartments, which can provide amenities on
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a need
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 basis.
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,
one
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 doesn't have to go through the hassle of moving all the furniture and utensils every
time
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 they
move
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either
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.
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 makes them less dependent on their home appliances.
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of
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course
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course,
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 comes with its own disadvantages
,
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;
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one
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 can never own too much stuff, which would be left behind if ever they have to
move
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 again. There is
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 a financial disadvantage if you choose to
rent
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 an
accomodation
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accommodation
,
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, you can pay a mortgage
instead
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 of
rent
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 and the property will be yours, but paying the same amount as
rent
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 defeats that purpose. Even if you want to settle down
somewhere
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somewhere,
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 you can not be paying
rent
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 all your life.
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, if you are looking to settle down in
one
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 place, be it out of necessity or of choice, buying a house can be convenient.
However
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, if you tend to
move
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 around different places or stay in any place for a short amount of
time
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,
then
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 renting a house is always going to be a better option.

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structure
Plan your essay. Put one main idea in each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
content
Add more facts or tiny examples to back up each point.
language
Check spelling and fix words that are wrong. Use short, simple sentences.
content
Give a balanced view. Say both good and bad of renting and buying, and then say what you think.
content
Clear idea that renting can suit people who move a lot.
structure
There is a closing line that sums up the view.
language
Use of linking words like However and To conclude.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rent
  • buy
  • home
  • house
  • owner
  • landlord
  • tenant
  • lease
  • contract
  • deposit
  • monthly
  • money
  • cost
  • price
  • loan
  • repair
  • fix
  • maintenance
  • move
  • stay
  • freedom
  • budget
  • plan
  • future
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • plus
  • minus
  • security
  • risks
  • rules
  • change
  • place
  • own
  • ownership
  • money
  • income
  • stay longer
  • stay short
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