Do contaminants cause pollution? To what extent do you agree?

Contaminants in the atmosphere appear to have harmful effects on neurodevelopment and cognitive function. When Lilian
Calderón-Garcidueñas
discovered abundant hallmarks of Alzheimer’s disease in a batch of human brain samples a few years ago, she
initially
wasn’t sure what to make of it. The University of Montana neuropathologist had been studying the
brains
as part of her research on environmental effects on neural development, and
this
particular set of samples came from autopsy examinations carried out on people who had died suddenly in
Mexico
City, where she used to work as a researcher and physician.
Although
Calderón-Garcidueñas
had collected much of the tissue herself
while
attending the autopsies in
Mexico
, the light-microscope slides she was analyzing had been prepared by her colleagues, so she was in the dark about what patient each sample came from. By the end of the project, she’d identified accumulations of the Alzheimer’s
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proteins amyloid-ß and hyperphosphorylated tau in almost all of the 203
brains
she studied. “When I started opening envelopes to see who [each sample] belonged to . . . I was devastated,” she says. The people whose
brains
she’d been studying were not only adults
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but teens and even children. The youngest was 11 months old. “My first thought was, ‘What am I going to do with
this
? What am I going to tell people?’” she says. “I was not expecting
such
a devastating, extreme pathology.” Despite her shock,
Calderón-Garcidueñas
had a reason to be on the lookout for signs of a disease usually associated with the elderly in these samples. For the
last
three decades, she’d been studying the health effects of
Mexico
City’s notoriously polluted air—a blight that earned the capital the dubious distinction of most polluted megacity on the planet from the United Nations in 1992. During that time,
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discovered many links between exposure to air pollution and signs of neural damage in animals and humans.
Although
her findings are observational, and the pathology of proteins
such
as amyloid-ß is not fully understood,
Calderón-Garcidueñas
argues that air pollution is the most likely culprit behind the development of the abnormalities she saw in her postmortem samples—plus many other detrimental changes to the
brains
of
Mexico
City’s residents.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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