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do the advantages of going abroad outweigh its disadvantages??

It is generally believed that shifting to foreign countries proves beneficial for the individuals. In my
opinion
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, staying abroad has many advantages in terms of economy and
education
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 of children. The advantages of shifting abroad
is
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are
 manifold, as people have more job opportunities in the foreign countries.
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, if we compare the income of doctors in our
country
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 compared with
United Kingdom
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the United Kingdom
 or United States of America, they earn many times more which adds to the job satisfaction as well.
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, they have respect in public due to the adequate implementation of
law
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the law
, which is not the case in our
country
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.
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, there are better educational prospects in
west
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the west
 in the form of higher
education
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 and better universities for children. The disadvantages of staying abroad may be the lack of family life and the difficulty in upbringing of children, but in my
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opinion
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opinion, this
this
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 can be counteracted by taking along the parents as well.
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, people believe that
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 leads to brain drain from the
country
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 as all
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 and highly educated will leave the
country
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 for better prospects. It is a huge setback for the
country
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, but, in my
opinion
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, these people are not only earning for themselves, they will highlight
name
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the name
 of
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country
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the country
 and send money to loved ones which adds to the economy. In my
opinion
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, working abroad is not only good for the individual in the form of monetary benefits and better
education
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 of
children but
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children, but
also
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 for the
country
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 as the foreign currency sent by the person plays an important part in the economy of his native
country
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.
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 In conclusion, moving to foreign countries should be encouraged whether it is for
education
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 or job purposes because of the multiple benefits it provides.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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