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People nowadays are more interested in technology rather than their physical fitness .to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #technology #fitness
In
this
 contemporary epoch, umpteen gadgets are available for the comfortability for homo-sapiens to make their life easy as compare to previous years.But it is reckoned by several masses that people are more interested to spend their
time
 on surfing
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 rather than doing any type of physical activity.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am in consummate accord with the notion. To commence with
,
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,
in
this
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
world people
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world, people
 try to earn enough money to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their basic amenities so they often do online jobs through
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
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.
In addition
 to
this
,
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,
mostly they use to spend
time
 to complete their works some often do part-
time
 jobs for their comfortability of life
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 it happens that folks are not having enough
time
 to do physical exercise to keep
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 fit and healthy.Apart from it, they have to sit for long hours to complete their work which results
to
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in
 several diseases by sitting for
long
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a long time
time
.
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.
For
example some
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example, some
 have to suffer from
obese
Suggestion
obesity
,
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,
asthama
respiratory disorder characterized by wheezing; usually of allergic origin
asthma
,
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,
digestion problems and so on. Futhermore
,
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,
youngsters are more interested towards the
technology even
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technology, even
 they every brand on electronic gadgets which are launching recently.As they are influenced by the celebrities to use the same applications which they are using and sharing with the public.
In addition
 to
this
,
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,
even youth of
this
 modern world is not worried about their studies as well as for their
physical fitness they
Suggestion
physical fitness, they
 spend
large amount
Suggestion
a large amount
large amounts
 of
time
 on surfing the internet. To recapitulate, the notion is having ill -
effects but
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effects, but
 it depends on an individual how to manage
time
 for proper work
also
 it can be tackled very easily if some pivotal measures should be taken by mortals.

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