the amount of time spend on sports and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight childer ? do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? what other solutions can you suggest

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people in all around the world face the difficulty for

overweigjt

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

overweight

its called obesity

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is most crucial in the environment because parents are so busy or less

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spent for

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health

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care than

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excessively fat

obese

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anounced

declared publicly; made widely known

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in sports or

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is most

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beneficial, but

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first

preceding all others in time or space or degree

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an advantage

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enrolling

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than increased sports or

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help to

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increase

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increases

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every morning

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organized morning

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the student

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more than seven subject difficult to manage

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in

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marking

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feel me refresh and more energies doing

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session.

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benefit like physically fit than

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fill uncomfortable during communication. To be more specific my friend in

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little bit

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need

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needs

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this time

these times

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one like her to sit in same

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a long seat for more than one person

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punches

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in starting age whose face by disease like diabetes, blood pressure trauma is

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absolutely essential

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remove

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an instance or single occasion for some event

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concern. The

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not fill

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doesn't fill

comfortable to daily workout so avoid to daily coming

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into

from

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whole

intrest

a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something

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interested

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record in a public office or in a court of law

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fired or less

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the major subject

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away from the

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than these

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effects

shown on

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the exam

an exam

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organized the

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or the sports

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in two

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time

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times

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schedule

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spent the

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more desirable than another

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other thinks

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advise to

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arranged

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special nutritional classes

the special nutritional class

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in the daily

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in new

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are not aware about junk food are healthy food so, these

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class

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classes

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the student to understand

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understand the

important

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importance

of the

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must be considered that increased the hour of

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or

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sports, but

eating the unhealthy food the effort are worthless. The better

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to

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now the obesity

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affects

is affecting

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present, but

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the future

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nutrion

(physiology) the organic process of nourishing or being nourished; the processes by which an organism assimilates food and uses it for growth and maintenance

nutrition

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help

undertsnad

know and comprehend the nature or meaning of

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the daily supplement

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vitamin e

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live life. The

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consider as the increased hour beneficial as the

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student but

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student, but

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betetr

(comparative of 'good') superior to another (of the same class or set or kind) in excellence or quality or desirability or suitability; more highly skilled than another

better

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to deal with

these problem

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this problem

these problems

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