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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Agriculture department is coming up with a new technology and technics in every other day, but what we are observing is
this
 thing are not quite working because hunger index is still on the high side. In my opinion increasing in malnutrition children and youth are examples of over population of
this
 world. We have very limited access towards our resources and most of the beneficiaries are non renewable, with limited land and limited water supply, we cannot make the whole world satisfied, and other reasons are people are migrating from villages to metro cities and very few people are doing farming for their bread and milk. Government should take necessary steps to encourage farmers, because they are the one who give us a
food
benefit
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. Government can provide easy loan, smarter techniques to do farming, help them to find water on their
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, free electricity and other necessary step which will benefits farmers in long run.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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